Saturday, January 27, 2007

MY SNW RESULTS

I got the manuscripts for my SNW 10 subs in the mail today.

My "Hero of the Empire" tale didn't make the cut. Too bad. It was one of my faves.

"Trial by Fire and Mis-Q's" got to the Second Read List (SRL), which is about the quarter-finals.

According to a note on my letter from Dean Wesley Smith, "History's Pawn" came "very close" to making it into the anthology.

That would make it a Finalist story.

I'm not sure how I feel about that since I was aiming for a publication rather than a "very close."

"Shikata ga nai."

All I can do is move on.

Since the Strange New Worlds anthology is no more, there go a couple of ideas I had for what would've been SNW 11. One of 'em was Lieutenant Reginald Barclay saving the Enterprise E from a changeling and a boarding party of Jem'Hadar warriors. Along the way, Barclay blew up a Hirogen relay station drawing power from a black hole.

It would've made an interesting addition to Pocket Book's "Dominion War" tales, me thinks.

Anywho, I'm moving ahead with my "The Way of the Peacemaker" and other original stories.

Tuesday, January 23, 2007

SNW 10 RESULTS

The results have come in today for the final SNW anthology.

I didn't make it.

Nichevo.

Or as the Japanese would say, "Shikata ga nai." (Can't be helped.)

I did my best, but my submissions apparently fell short.

The good thing is the waiting's over. The winners were contacted on about December 20, 2006. Usually the announcement is made on January 3 of the new year, but it was put off according to undefined legal issues on the part of the Pocket Book lawyers.

SNW was unique in that it was a pro publication consisting of Trek stories for the fans written by the fans. IMHO, a drawback of how it was run was that multiple writers could be published in it up to three times maximum. I feel that the SNW anthology could have been run like the WOTF anthology: winners are published once and then ineligible for further contests thereafter in order to give voice to a wider range of writers--especially since SNW had to be renewed yearly and its life was limited.

Anyhow, SNW was only one market. Getting in would've been a nice feather in one's cap, but not a laurel to rest one's writing career on.

It's time to leave SNW and Trek behind me and concentrate on WOTF and other bigger and better things.

Sunday, January 21, 2007

JEANNE CAVELOS CRIT

Today I received a crit from Jeanne Cavelos, my first pro fiction mentor on my story "The Way of the Peacemaker" (formerly "Honor and Justice").

Jeanne's crit was an unexpected bonus.

After being sundered from the Odyssey fold for the last few years, I joined the Odfellow discussion group for the first time late last year. Then I signed up for my third stint on the Odfellow critique group a few weeks ago when Jeanne sent a missive saying that the group needs new blood and she'll be participating. I couldn't sign up soon enough, and I submitted my space opera tale, which I'm prepping for the Writers of the Future SF/F Contest (WOTF).

"The Way of the Peacemaker" is about a galactic guardian in the future who learns the true cost of his oath to protect the innocent. The guardian comes from a line of samurai sworn to protect the innocent of the ages.

I've written a film script based in this Peacemaker universe, but before I market the script, I thought I'd establish the series in fiction and comics first. "The Way of the Peacemaker" is the pilot story. Hopefully, it'll launch in WOTF.

Saturday, January 20, 2007

Retro Review: "KING KONG"

Hi all,

Since I don't care for a lot of current releases, I'm writing about Peter Jackson's "King Kong" remake.

In a word...spectacular, clumsy, hilarious, ludicrously self-indulgent, terrifying and far too long.

No, that was more like a spiel.

While there's not an original bone in its oversized body, "King Kong!!!" qualifies as one of the blockbuster films of 2005. The sheer size and spectacle of it screams, "Keep your eyes on me!" And, "Pay no attention to some of the bad miscasting, and scenes that go a little too long." "I'm Kong, and I must be BIG!" No, not big, HUGE!!

I'm not really a fan of remakes or King Kong, so I thought the film could be pretty hoaky. But I was intrigued when I learned that Peter Jackson was helming this flick. I didn't know till lately that the original 1933 flick was something of a passion of his.

A problem with personal projects is running the danger of not working because the director is too close to the material. (Steven Spielberg's Hook and Atom Egoyan's Ararat fall into that category.) Fortunately, Jackson's passion for the material did not dim his creative senses. By combining the best elements of the 1933 and 1976 versions of the film with his own contributions, Jackson has made what many will consider to be the definitive King Kong. There's no need to try this story again; it's doubtful it can be improved on.

Jackson's 2005 King Kong follows the basic storyline of the 1933 original, but with some changes and wrinkles. There are a few direct homages, including a reference to Fay Wray being unavailable for Carl Denham's film because she was "making something for Cooper," a snatch of the hammiest verbatim dialogue from the old screenplay, and a few bars of Max Steiner's theme. Although Jackson says he detests the 1976 version, he borrows freely from it. Some things that happen in this King Kong mirror events from the De Laurentiis one too closely to have occurred by coincidence. (Like the development of a two-way relationship between the girl and Kong, rather than the one-way one from 1933.)

If there's a flaw in King Kong, it's that Jackson spends TOO LONG setting things up. It's understandable that he wants to spend some time with the characters so we get to know them before the action starts, but the 70-minute build-up is overkill. There is an impact to early momentum, and I dozed for a few minutes before the second act kicked in. First we spend some time in a thrillingly recreated 30s New York, and then the film gets stuck in a boat for simply ages with obsessed movie director Carl Denham (Jack Black) and his crew. This interlude, marred as it is by portents of doom and clanging dialogue, is a bit of a trial.

We meet all of the major players during the first hour, where you notice some of the film's major flaws, including the fact that Jackson, fails to establish the relationship between Denham's long time collaborator the successful playwright, Jack Driscoll (Adrien Brody), and Ann (Naomi Watts). Adrien Brody seems somewhat miscast to me as the lead action hero and leading man in love here.

Fran Walsh, Philippa Boyens, and Peter Jackson's script doesn't give Jack and Ann a real relationship. Their chemistry is sketchy at best, feeling contrived and rushed: they meet and hate each other one minute, the next time they see each other they are kissing, and then he tells her he "wrote a comedy, just for her."

"Why would you do that" asks Ann.

"Isn't it obvious?" says Jack.

Because Ann is pretty?

That exchange is supposed to convey to the audience the depth of his feelings. But it comes across as forced.

Once the action starts, however, it's difficult to find something more energetic, more daring, and more touching than King Kong. It's worth every penny (and more) that was spent bringing it to the screen.

The CGI work and action scenes are all incredible, and mind blowing, but you get the feeling that it's been done before, oh yeah, because it has, in Jurassic Park! It was as if Jackson, not only remade the original King Kong, but he also remade the original Jurassic Park, so many of the beats, and battles felt like it was taken directly from that film.

As eye candy goes, only Revenge of the Sith equals it from 2005, and King Kong is overall a richer and more satisfying cinematic experience (and this is from someone who's a SF fan). If you think of the 1933 King Kong as a foundation of a house, the 2005 version is the whole thing. Jackson has used Cooper's vision as his blueprint, and has expanded upon it greatly without changing the essential floorplan. The synopsis sounds much the same, but the experience is wholly different.

The old Arabian proverb says this: "And lo, the beast looked upon the face of beauty. And it stayed its hand from killing. And from that day, it was as one dead." This is, and has been, the story of King Kong, the 25-foot tall giant of an ape who rules his island, but finds man to be the superior predator. Led by his fascination for a blond woman to act in ways contrary to his nature, he is ensnared and brought to a foreign land, where he proves inadequate to counter the forces brought to bear against him. It's easy enough to see King Kong as a parable about man's rapacious approach to nature. That aspect of the story is as evident in Jackson's telling as in the environmentally conscious 1976 version.

Ann Darrow (Naomi Watts) is a struggling actress who finds herself out of work with no means to pay for a meal. Filmmaker Carl Denham (Jack Black) is being pursued by his creditors and needs to find a leading lady so he can set sail before the authorities catch him. Fortuitously, it would seem, the two meet, and Ann is soon aboard the Venture, heading for lands unknown. The captain, Engelhorn (Thomas Kretschmann), is a surly chap who doesn't trust Denham. Also aboard the ship is Jack Driscoll (Adrien Brody), the screenwriter for Denham's latest epic. And there's a hunky actor, Bruce Baxter (Kyle Chandler), who is intended to play Ann's on-screen love interest. Off-screen, she becomes involved with Jack. The two are involved by the time the ship reaches its destination, Skull Island. There, Ann is kidnapped by the natives and sacrificed to their god, Kong. Instead of killing her, however, the big ape is intrigued by his blond-haired captive, and the two bond - Ann does a vaudeville comedy routine for her captor while he protects her from three T-Rexes. Meanwhile, Jack, Carl, and a group of others from the ship come ashore to look for Ann. They don't find her--at least not initially-- but they encounter a menagerie out of Jurassic Park and insects that might eat horses for a snack.

A great line during this sequence from Bruce who quits the search for Ann for a little spell is: "I'm an actor with a gun who's lost his motivation."

Genius...

Eventually, Ann is rescued, Kong is captured, and the action moves to New York City. Breaking free of his manacles on the first night he is being displayed to the public, Kong locates Ann and climbs to the top of the Empire State Building, where his tragic final stand occurs.

The ending sequence is truly breathtaking, the aerial photography and CGI made me feel as if I was really at the top of the Empire State Building. American soldiers never seemed more evil. My heart actually dropped a few seconds. King Kong feels like and is 3 distinct films, there's the beginning, then the Jurassic Kong in the middle, and the 3rd act feels like a tacted on sequel.

Despite three prominent human actors, the star of the movie is the giant primate. Kong has gone from being an 18-inch high clay puppet to a man in a monkey suit to a beautifully rendered CGI creature. His range of motion and ability to react believably have improved with each incarnation. This Kong uses an amazing range of facial expressions and, when you look into his eyes, you can't believe he isn't real. Andy Serkis, who helped Jackson by "playing" Gollum in The Lord of the Rings, lends his motion capture skills to Kong, and the results are so stunning that one is tempted to believe that Jackson went to a South Pacific Island and found a 25-foot high ape. Kong shows nearly every emotion across the spectrum: puzzlement, rage, amusement, bemusement, possessiveness, tenderness, and affection. And Kong does some things that couldn't have been accomplished using any other special effects technique. Try orchestrating the T-Rex battle another way.

The best of the trio of human performers is Aussie knockout Naomi Watts, who gives an Oscar level performance. When Jack attempts to rescue her from the arms of a sleeping Kong, her face reveals joy, embarrassment, dismay and sadness all in one beat.

Naomi has the most difficult job--not only is the role physical, but it requires her to play off something that isn't there. (For better or for worse this is becoming the norm, rather than the exception, in big-budget motion pictures). Like Kong, Ann must traverse a vast emotional range, from horror and fear, to acceptance, to caring. Adrien Brody does the best he can with a thankless role. Jack's part is to fall in love with Ann, then run around the island chasing her. In New York, he gets to participate in a car chase, but after that, his biggest contribution is to ride an elevator in the Empire State Building. Jack Black, an unusual choice for Carl Denham, plays the movie maker like a cross between Cecil B. DeMille and P.T. Barnum. Black's portrayal is primarily straight, and he is effective, although there are occasions when the actor's cheesy personality peeks through.

Black's character, Denham, is a "by any means necessary" type of filmmaker, where he will lie, cheat, or steal to get his project finished. He convinces everyone from his actor, to the ship's crewmates that they are filming in Singapore, when he's really taking them into the dangerous unknown. In many ways, Kong is not only a movie about the love of a woman and her monkey, but also a love letter to filmmaking. As sleazy as Denham is at times, you have to admire his passion for getting his film done. It's also fun because you don't really know if that passion is because he's broke and he's desperate, or if he really loves the creative process. I'd bet that it's both.

Jack Black is almost fatally miscast in this, though. He doesn't fit the part and his manic performance, at times seems out of place. But he does manage to hold it together, next to Kong and Watts. The film rises and falls in part based on his shoulders and for the most part it works - just not as well as it should. It's a contradiction to say he's wrong for the part and then claim that he's good in this, but the best way to describe it is, you get used to him. Some of his line deliveries are almost too understated, especially the most famous one about "It was beauty that killed the beast." It didn't have the emotional punch that it should have.
The cornerstone of the film isn't the CGI action/adventure material; it's the relationship between Kong and Ann. Here's where the movie's heart lies, and for King Kong to be more than a visual extravaganza, Jackson has to hit us beneath the left rib cage. The two bond throughout and the film's soul stays intact. In 1933, Ann was terrified of Kong. He treated her like a plaything, and she hated and feared him. When Kong died, we felt a little sadness, but nothing overwhelming. In 1976, Lorenzo Semple Jr.'s most important innovation was to have the female lead (called Dwan, played by Jessica Lange) reciprocate the Beast's feelings. Kong was fascinated by Dwan. After an initial bout of fear and anger, she accepted him as a gentle protector. Atop the World Trade Center, she risked her life to save his, and her world came apart when he fell. The male lead (Jeff Bridges) was also shown as being sympathetic to Kong.

For the 2005 version, Jackson has followed the 1976 movie's lead, and developed a tender, two-way relationship between Ann and Kong. This is meticulously advanced over the course of the movie--particularly in three scenes. The first has Ann doing a vaudeville song-and-dance routine that amuses Kong and convinces him not to kill her. The second has Ann moving behind Kong during a battle with three T-Rexes, acknowledging him as her "champion." And the third involves a frozen pond in Central Park, and may represent King Kong's most magical moment, and Jackson's lasting contribution to the legend. If you see that bit, you'll know what I'm talking about. Unlike in the 1976 movie, Jack is not kindly disposed toward Kong. This may be why, in the end, the bond between Ann and Kong seems stronger than the one between Ann and Jack. And the reunion of the two human lovers after Kong's plunge rings hollow. We don't really care about Ann and Jack. The character we do care about has just died. His final moments with Ann are quietly heartbreaking.
One of the most difficult things about King Kong may be picking a favorite scene, especially since the final two hours are packed with candidates. Action-adventure lovers have the dino-rampage, featuring raptors (I liked the Jurassic Park versions better) chasing down a pack of brontosaurs; the triple T-Rex smackdown (a tour de force that lasts about 10 minutes); an insect attack that will make bug-phobes squirm (Indiana Jones and the Temple of Doom is tame by comparison); Kong's attempts to reclaim his stolen bride; and the final Empire State Building battle. For me, the quiet moments are in many ways more rewarding: Kong and Ann bonding while watching a sunset, and the playfulness of Central Park. The latter is more rewarding with tragedy looming so close.

The musical score is nondescript, but that's not James Newton Howard's fault. He was selected by Jackson late in the process to replace Howard Shore, and only had a couple of months to write and record everything. The best thing that can be said about the music is that it's never intrusive. Visually, as one would expect, King Kong is a marvel. The decision to do no location shooting allows the Skull Island scenes to be eerie and claustrophobic. And Jackson's re-creation of Depression-era New York, while not rigorously accurate historically, fits nicely into a nostalgia mold.

King Kong could easily be 30 minutes shorter. But it's a labor of love for Jackson. It shows in every frame, in the clever script and in the way he photographs his stars with the loving texture of 1930s pin-ups. Most of all, he establishes a Depression-era aura of dashed dreams and rebuilt hopes and turns out an entertainment worth remembering.
SIT REP

At the moment, I'm still in a kind of holding pattern writingwise:

-Still waiting for the results of the SNW 10 contest

-Eking out my revision of my rom com script "Twice In A Lifetime"

-Organizing the third script reading on the WeHo Screenwriting Group (the first had two crits & the second had four)

-And prepping my space opera short story "The Way of the Peacemaker" for critiquing by some pro writers before I send it to WOTF.

It seems I'm on the cusp of big things while the winter doldrums're on.

Hailing frequencies closed.

Sunday, January 07, 2007

Review: “ROCKY BALBOA”

Yo, Rocky’s back for one last round.

First James Bond gets back to basics, now, 30 years after the Philly southpaw came out swinging, Sylvester Stallone has returned to Rocky's humble roots with a stripped down edition that comes close to capturing the soul of the original -- which I saw on TV and rental.

The first one, with a budget of less than $1 million, was a smash hit -- the 78th greatest movie by the AFI, pulling in more than $56 million in 1976 dollars. Reportedly written over a weekend, it won an Oscar for Best Picture and became one of the smash hits of the‘70s.

The only installment I saw in theaters was 1990’s torturous “Rocky V.” Afterwards, I swore I’d never do it again. But I went and did it...

Dropping the Roman numerals, "Rocky Balboa" -- the sixth in the series-- defies all expectations with a low-key production. Just as he did back in 1976, Rocky -- and by extension Stallone -- is climbing into the ring as a man with something to prove. And for the first time in thirty years, you just might find yourself cheering him on.

With his beloved Adrian (Talia Shire’s alive and well) having passed away of cancer, Rocky trudges along the streets of his South Philly neighborhood like a man who's been beaten down by the ravages of time and bittersweet memories of all-too-distant glories.

He's only too happy to regale patrons at his eatery, Adrian's, with those stories, but his habit of living in the past is beginning to grate on his old brother-in-law Paulie (Burt Young, who's been there for all six rounds), who's no longer wants to accompany Rocky on those ritual tours through his old haunts. Rocky also tries to spend quality time with his grown son (Milo Ventimiglia), but the young man wishes to climb out from under his famous father's shadow.

Fortunately the Rocko we know and love snaps back into form when an installment of ESPN's "Man vs. Machine," which pits two athletes from different eras against each other in a computer-simulated competition, has current heavyweight champ Mason "The Line" Dixon (real-life boxer Antonio Tarver) going up against Balboa in a hypothetical bout that gives the Italian Stallion the decision. Keep in mind that Mason isn’t a villain. Just a guy with his own problems, being unpopular for having faced no real contenders in his rise to the heavy weight title. He’s Rocky in Rocky III all over again, but the movie isn’t about him.

Anywho, Rocky's back in training for the real thing, calcified joints and all, much to the embarrassment of Robert. Though everyone tells him he's likely to be murderized, the sixty-something Italian Stallion quietly accepts the challenge, throws himself into a few weeks of training and steps in the ring, with the philosophy, "It's not how hard you hit, but how much you can take and stay on your feet."

Yes, it's improbable, but the premise of the original "Rocky" was almost as hare-brained, and its lure of the impossible dream and appeal of not so much winning but "going the distance" is what made it such an influential, often imitated classic.

Conti’s score kicks in full bore for the expected training montage. Once again, good ol' Rocko pounds away at frozen slabs of beef, knocks back a glass of raw eggs and, of course, runs up the steps of the Philadelphia Museum of Art. After that, it's off to Las Vegas for the big showdown with Dixon.

The one area in which Stallone has consistently shined as director of the “Rocky” films is in his well choreographed and edited fight sequences. He repeats the feat in “Balboa,” giving us our money's worth in a bloody celebration of brute stamina. While the ending of the fight is never really in doubt, it's surprising how much genuine tension Stallone manages to wring out of this unlikely battle, in which both fighters unload on each other with everything they've got.

Stallone's grass-roots approach works well. Passing on studio sets in favor of actual locations with extensive handheld camerawork (incorporating both 35mm and high-def film), Stallone reconnects with a lot of what made the character so endearing in the first place. He shows a discreet use of foreground and background to highlight or underline emotional moments. A scene in which father and son confront one another may be Stallone's finest moment on film.

In addition to all the familiar faces -- Tony Burton also returns as Balboa corner man, Duke -- Irish actress Geraldine Hughes does affecting work as the grown-up Marie (played three decades ago by Jodi Letitizia), now a hard-working single mother of a Steps, a teenage thug in training (James Francis Kelly III), whom Rock has taken under his wing out of the goodness of his big heart. He also offers Marie a job; this friendship hints at elements of romance, but remains touchingly tactful.

Of course, Rocky wouldn't be Rocky without that signature theme, and Conti has turned it into elegiac lament for the first half of the picture before cranking it up to full throttle for that last hurrah, as well as backing amusing end-credits footage of tourists from all over re-enacting the iconic running up of those Philadelphia Museum of Art steps.

In interviews, Stallone has said that he intends “Rocky Balboa” to be a bookend to the original film and, as promised, viewers can leap directly from that movie to this one without having to make time for the other four installments. Aside from a passing reference to his victory over Apollo Creed and brief glimpses of Clubber Lang and Ivan Drago, the events of “Rockys” II-IV go unmentioned, while the, um, disliked “Rocky V” has been erased from continuity, along with any mention of Rocky's supposed brain damage. “Rocky Balboa” is also filled with numerous visual cues and references to the '76 picture. The result is a film that's as much a nostalgia trip for the audience as it is for its star.

The goodwill generated by this approach carries viewers through the movie's dead spots, including one too many visits to Adrian’s grave, Rocky's awkward attempts to bond with Steps, and an underwritten storyline involving Mason Dixon's own crisis of confidence. A subplot about Dixon and his manager also suddenly disappears. It's in these scenes that Stallone's limitations as a writer and director show up. After thirty years he knows his own character inside and out, but he still struggles to write convincing dialogue for anyone other than Rocky.

The film isn’t about Rocky carrying on conversations, though. The script comes from an honest place, and the characters have real emotional centers. On its own terms, “Rocky Balboa” is only a modestly entertaining movie, but taken in context, it's an entirely satisfying conclusion to the “Rocky” saga. It's not so much a sequel or even a remake for a new generation of moviegoers as it's a retranslation for the old one: an irresistible statement that "Yo, life ain't over till it's over."

Will we be seeing a weathered Rambo brought back to basics next?

Saturday, January 06, 2007

Reinvent Trek or Go into the Next Century?

I recently came across an article on SyFy Portal in which "Trouble with Tribbles" TOS episode scribe and TNG contributor David Gerrold said he believes that the classic series (TOS) has to be rebooted in order to get
back that old Star Trek feeling.

There have been some great reinventions like "Battlestar Galactica" (BSG), "Batman Begins," and "Casino Royale."

I believe, though, that Trek is one franchise with the elasticity and depth that allows people to explore Trek's essence with new characters and storylines as opposed to rebooting the same cast of characters every ten years.

IMHO, BSG doesn't quite fall in that same category because the original was around for only two years, leaving a lot of new territory for Ron Moore and company to explore. Also the premise of BSG is based on the last remnants of humanity fighting off extinction and finding Earth. Either they fail and the show ends or they succeed and the show ends.

Also, for those who're familiar with the subject, I'd liken Trek a little bit to the US Constitution in that the Constitution has been adapted from how the Founding Fathers first conceived it to be made relevant to following generations of Americans.

I favor new characters and storylines for new generations of Trek fans rather than new incarnations of overly familiar characters and their situations. Every chapter of a saga has a beginning, middle, and end. I feel it's best to move on into new territory rather than tweak series canon.

If someone good like Ron Moore, Bryan Singer, or Michael Stracyznski were to do a reinvention, I could see it being "interesting." Who can argue with what Ron Moore and his crew have done with BSG? As those who may recall my earlier posts on the subject, I highly doubt that Abrams will do justice to a young Kirk story in the upcoming (if it's ever made) Trek XI.
SIT REP

Busy, busy, busy...

The New Year's kinda flew by for me in a daze.

I'm tweaking my WOTF space opera sub "The Way of the Peacemaker" for some pro readers, and getting good comments from other fledgling writers.

I'm getting comments on my Stephen Decatur script "Stars and Stripes Forever."

I'm working on my rom com script "Twice In A Lifetime." I'm roughly halfway through the beat sheet. Then I'll do character profiles. Then I'll start rewriting...

Ugh...

And I'm organizing a group read for a drama script penned by a person on the WeHo (West Hollywood) online screenwriters group that I'm trying out. As the manager, I'm committed to this event, but I doubt I'll stay long term with them since that group isn't very lively and it can be a fair amount of work managing it if you want to do the job right. :-)

I'd also committed myself to reading the featured script and perhaps entering in an online workshop with the other writer to work on other scripts. Must be careful that I don't overload myself when I'm not working.

Oh, and I'm still waiting on the results for SNW 10. Because there's a new editor at Simon & Schuster Books who's judging, the normal reporting time has been pushed back from the normal January 3 date to...sometime in January.

Nichevo.